The essay was amazingly cute, and it definately made me see how much your brother loves soccer. It also was a good dipiction of a day in the life of a child. The photographs were almost all perfect. I especially liked the one where he was on the slide. Some of the photos seemed a little out of focus, though, but they were always visually interesting and filled the frame. The sound was very cute, but it seemed like your brother was a little too close to the recorder, which made him really really loud and sometimes a little hard to understand. But his song at the end was amazingly cute. I also liked how it was organized, and it seemed to go in the order that your brother talks about. Good job!
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-from Emma
I give this a 7.
The essay was amazingly cute, and it definately made me see how much your brother loves soccer. It also was a good dipiction of a day in the life of a child. The photographs were almost all perfect. I especially liked the one where he was on the slide. Some of the photos seemed a little out of focus, though, but they were always visually interesting and filled the frame. The sound was very cute, but it seemed like your brother was a little too close to the recorder, which made him really really loud and sometimes a little hard to understand. But his song at the end was amazingly cute. I also liked how it was organized, and it seemed to go in the order that your brother talks about. Good job!
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